Just a heads up for anyone wanting to play the game the last update was two years ago along with the Creators activity on this website from what I can see from their comment history
I was really excited to read the next chapter, but after seeing all the comments being over a year old I am really dissapointed. This was a really great first chapter and I hope this hasnt been totally abandonned.
Very good writing, good subject and story, I was hooked from the beginning, and I really like that racism is a big part of the story, because it has to be discussed and to be reminded constantly of. BUT: first, the author didn’t consider MC of color, the story just doesn’t acknowledge it. If you wanted to go for an experience of non poc with racism, then it doesn’t make sense for darker skin options for MCs. And second thing, I had no idea Velia is black until I read the comments and I just thought that she’s just really really afraid of cops, bc the whole scene didn’t make sense to me, at first. But at the end I truly like it. The premise is good and I’m excited where the story take me.
I’ve definitely taken into account Mc’s of color into the future update and I plan to go back and add coding scenes specifically for that! As a black author it’s important that the customization affects the story this was just a quick demo that will def have major changes in the future, and when you first meet Velia her locs are described which was how I was showing the reader she was black but it’s easy to miss so I’ll most likely add more detail in!
lovely game with fantastic writing! im excited to know more about the characters and story uve created! I especially love Velia and im excited for the mystery aspect already
Velia being a black lesbian is an important part of her character and the struggles she goes through living in a small town, and while we would love to have more RO’s, this is our first attempt at coding anything similar to this so we’re starting out small. I understand the frustration but there isn’t a lack of interactive fiction out there with female RO’s who can be romanced by Male MC’s :)
Ah okay, I can understand if it's an important part of her character. Maybe you could add a platonic route at the final version of the game, that is, once you're more used to writing interactive fiction. But, in the end, it's your story, you're the author and so it's your choice. Apart from that, I really like the plot and wish you the best of luck.
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Just a heads up for anyone wanting to play the game the last update was two years ago along with the Creators activity on this website from what I can see from their comment history
it's never gonna be updated is it
I keep reading all these good stories to find out they've been abandonned
I was really excited to read the next chapter, but after seeing all the comments being over a year old I am really dissapointed. This was a really great first chapter and I hope this hasnt been totally abandonned.
Hi?
i really hope you didn't give up on this! i already love the characters and can't wait until there's another part if at all.
Is there only a demo so far?
I read this IF a long time ago, but I sincerely hope it hasn't been abandoned 🥹. It's quite intriguing and full of potential.
That gave me "The Fog Knows Your Name" vibes for some reason :P. And also, none of the LI are my type BUT I'm curious about the story.
How do I go to the next page/slide?
:( im stuck here
That happened to me too since you're on phone I recommend switching the browser to "desktop site" since that seems to fix it!:D
tysmmmm ❤️
I've been waiting for a reply for quite sometime 🙂
Nppp! I hoped it helped!
(btw I love your Mob pfp)
it definitely did <3
Ahhh ...finally someone who also watched mob ✨ tyyyy ;)
This story made me actually cry it's so sad. Hope the MC gets the answers they need they deserve it and Devon is avenged.
Very good writing, good subject and story, I was hooked from the beginning, and I really like that racism is a big part of the story, because it has to be discussed and to be reminded constantly of. BUT: first, the author didn’t consider MC of color, the story just doesn’t acknowledge it. If you wanted to go for an experience of non poc with racism, then it doesn’t make sense for darker skin options for MCs. And second thing, I had no idea Velia is black until I read the comments and I just thought that she’s just really really afraid of cops, bc the whole scene didn’t make sense to me, at first. But at the end I truly like it. The premise is good and I’m excited where the story take me.
I’ve definitely taken into account Mc’s of color into the future update and I plan to go back and add coding scenes specifically for that! As a black author it’s important that the customization affects the story this was just a quick demo that will def have major changes in the future, and when you first meet Velia her locs are described which was how I was showing the reader she was black but it’s easy to miss so I’ll most likely add more detail in!
lovely game with fantastic writing! im excited to know more about the characters and story uve created! I especially love Velia and im excited for the mystery aspect already
Thank you so much!! And that’s so valid Velia is my fave
Looks like an interesting game, but I want to ask why can't the only female RO be romanced by a male MC? I mean, you only have 3 RO's.
Velia being a black lesbian is an important part of her character and the struggles she goes through living in a small town, and while we would love to have more RO’s, this is our first attempt at coding anything similar to this so we’re starting out small. I understand the frustration but there isn’t a lack of interactive fiction out there with female RO’s who can be romanced by Male MC’s :)
Ah okay, I can understand if it's an important part of her character. Maybe you could add a platonic route at the final version of the game, that is, once you're more used to writing interactive fiction. But, in the end, it's your story, you're the author and so it's your choice. Apart from that, I really like the plot and wish you the best of luck.
Platonic routes are definitely something we’re considering in the final version of the game :) and thank u!